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Keith Long's avatar

This is such high quality. I'm taking mental notes for my own crime story. You know your stuff.

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Jim J Wilsky's avatar

Well Keith, I’m speechless. Thanks so much. Appreciate you not only for taking the time to read, but to leave such a generous comment. Once again, a sincere thank you. - Jim

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K.C. Knouse's avatar

The dialog and mannerisms came across as super realistic: brief and to the point. I enjoy these scenes in the station, Jim. Each character had their tics and mannerisms. You moved the plot along with some new clues but saved the plans for the next chapter. Things are on the move. Great job.

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Jim J Wilsky's avatar

Thanks so much K.C. , so glad you are liking it. The challenge with a story like this is to stay true to all the characters and keep past details accurate. I do a lot of what I call 'back and forth writing', haha. Appreciate you K.C. - Jim

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Liz Zimmers's avatar

I saw it all unfold like a movie. Like I was a detective in the room being briefed with all of them. Great cranking of the tension!

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Jim J Wilsky's avatar

Thanks so much Liz. It means everything hearing from you on this story. Crime stories aren't for everyone, that's become painfully clear, but you are always around to support and I appreciate it more than you know. - Jim

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Sharron Bassano's avatar

This is such fine writing, Jim! Superb dialogue! I hear your knowledge, your research, my friend.

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Jim J Wilsky's avatar

I'm glad you like it Sharron. Thanks so much for reading and leaving such generous comments. Appreciate it. - Jim

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Jim Cummings's avatar

I feel like I'm in the room with these detectives, privy to the process and all the secret details. Great story, Jim.

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Jim J Wilsky's avatar

Thanks Jimbo. All of a sudden I wanted to give Wyatt Allen a little more exposure, not sure why. I'm modeling his character after a boss I had at work, years ago. He was a smooth piece of work. Never forgot him - and he never forgot the people that worked for him. Glad your liking this one and appreciate you bud. - Jim

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Sharron Bassano's avatar

For me, Wyatt Allen was instantly recognizable and likeable. I am glad you brought him into focus.

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